I’ve been so busy, I’m falling out of practice with my writing and need some insight, thanks.
Let Us Meet Again
We were bonded by cigarettes and insomnia;
two in a tray and one pile of ash.
Joined together in the foggy haze of a bar,
where we contemplated life.
And sometimes, my friend, we shine so brightly upon that which we love, that we unwittingly cast
shadows upon everything else,
like our dreams, our dreams.
And the smoke clouds have to clear before we can breathe and the light has to dim before we can
see
where we are, where we’re going. And along our midnight road, the circadian rhythms of a
sleeping world only act as a sieve to questions only clarified beyond the horizons of a tray.
And so we have to part ways.
And though it seems so far a distance to travel and the weight of an empty universe is heavy,
we have to tell ourselves that this too is only temporary; gravity, time, and matter-
and that perhaps the bright blaze of a dying ember had lived as long as a star.
And these smoldering cinders are but a small portion of who we really are.
Be Patient, my love, we’ve already traveled so far.
Broken Down
What about our stories?
Are our struggles not enough
to pass these hours-
our plans?
Lets Run through the night,
till we’re ablaze in the sun,
and parked the same old spot;
Hood popped open,
plume of smoke,
and nowhere else to go.
What’s left of our midnight
road,
our stars,
our plans,
now that hope retreats
to shade and shadow?
Stifled by heat,
no wheels to steer;
abandoned to streets
and running on fear;
You can take my hand,
and we can walk.
Vehicles are fragile,
and too often break down,
It’s what’s inside
that drives, drives, drives.
Chosen Answer:
The second one plain sucks.
The first has some nice alliteration, some good visuals…but is unclear whether its about a friend or a lover. It would make interesting LYRICS, though!